Some thigs seemed really cool, like seeing a show on Broadway. But other things weren't as cool, like going to college...how fun...not. Also, some of the videos were hard to understand. Other than that it was cool!
Sarah Matlow. I thought that the thins that you wanted to do were really cool. The music was neat in the end. I marked you down 2 points for your video being clearly spoken and 2 points for articulating your words a little bit more. I gave you a 96/100. Great job!
Your quality of writing could have been better, there were a lot of incomplete sentences and sentence fragments. That made it sound as if you were only listing facts instead of incorporating them into a script. You introduction was also very short and lackluster, and it did not draw me in. Adam Audet Hour 5
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Ronnie Hall 5th hr. 85/100 -5 for paint image -5 for transitions -5 for long gaps in speech.
Some thigs seemed really cool, like seeing a show on Broadway. But other things weren't as cool, like going to college...how fun...not. Also, some of the videos were hard to understand. Other than that it was cool!
Abbie Spencer Hr. 5
i liked how interested in your topics 94% -Ally hansen 5th hour
Sarah Matlow.
I thought that the thins that you wanted to do were really cool. The music was neat in the end. I marked you down 2 points for your video being clearly spoken and 2 points for articulating your words a little bit more. I gave you a 96/100. Great job!
Your quality of writing could have been better, there were a lot of incomplete sentences and sentence fragments. That made it sound as if you were only listing facts instead of incorporating them into a script. You introduction was also very short and lackluster, and it did not draw me in.
Adam Audet Hour 5
your project was good but there were a few pauses between topics and there was no paint image.
Dylan Gibbs Hour 5
LACK OF EFFORT
thought it was good
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